Putting it to good use as blog filler

I'm finishing up a piece I'm writing for that gig-to-be-anounced. It is taking up my usual spare blogging time.  I do have an entire paragraph that I just cut that I don't want to delete entirely.  Even though I am listening to a Tim Gunn-sounding voice in my head ("Look at this with an editing eye?"), I am not ready to send it into oblivion.  For what I am writing (for a largely expat and local English speaking audience), it is probably extraneous. Don't hate on it too much.

We arrived in February, not Beijing's best month. Winter's lingering cold meant grey skies, grey air, and a coating of coal dust on everything not moving. The Beijingers barely peeking out from puffy layers did not seem to the be the friendly lot we were told by all our Chinese friends we would no doubt encounter. After two and a half years in the perpetually green (and much, much warmer) Shenzhen, we were now wondering what were we thinking when we accepted this move, or at least our timing. Of course, spring eventually arrived. The air cleared, and layers were shed. We were able to meet our neighbors and acquaint ourselves better with Changping, our new home.

Comments

Unknown said…
If this is an example of what you cut, I'm getting pretty excited about reading what you keep :).
Jen Ambrose said…
Thanks, guys, though I'm afraid that style-wise, this was the best part. Content-wise, it was extraneous.
Very evocative.

I know what you mean about being unable to consign it to oblivion. Thank goodness for blogs where the unpublishable bits and pieces get to see the light of day.
Jen Ambrose said…
Thanks, Melanie. Since the audience for this will be English-speakers who already live in BJ, I thought the descriptions would fall under, "Tell me something I didn't already know."

But hey, anyone else that likes it that wants to pay me scale, and have a longer limit than 600 words, I'd be more than happy to sell the piece to you with this (as well as a few adverbs) inserted back in.